We are working on step um three which is the rubric.

I had to ask a friend to come and check my story and she has to put

what she liked about the narration and if any questions

like what she didn't understand about it and then advice so she

needs to give me advice like um put more put more dialoge

or yeah... something like that.

Writer's Workshop is the writing process it teaches kids how to

write in a structured, repetetive way. But it also

gives them a chance to choose their own theme.

and in that way develop a lifelong will to write.

It's a process that includes planning and then writing

the rough draft and then revising. You can revise

by themselves, with a teacher, . And then they finally write thr

final draft and then they are able to share and you just cycle.

The kids never stop writing they always have something to do.

What I am basically doing is

I'm just..I'm Just

like I just make up a story

and I'm writing it down on a

paper that has where I put pictures and where I write.

I believe that Writer's Workshop fosters and enjoyment of writing

because the students get to pick their own topics

they get to express themselves it is authentic writing.

They know they are writing for a purpose

whether it to be to share with their friends at the end of the

session or to take it home to share with their parents.

And they just see a purpose in it and it is their choice.

They don't get many choices all the time and this is the

one time when they get to express themselves and show

what they can do.

I try to do Writer's Workshop three days a week and every

Writer's Workshop I try to do a fifteen minute mini lesson.

I choose the mini lesson according to what the students

needs. It's completely student driven. If I see when I am

editing that they need um dialogue, I will focus a

mini lesson on dialogue. Or if it is a beginning,

I will focus on a beginning.

So how I want to start today is with a mini lesson.

and what I've been noticing when I am editing with you is

that our beginings are great. We have strong beginnings. We'e

introducing our characters, we'e introducing our settings.

so I want to show you a differet way to begin a beginning

with dialogue. And we have used dialogue, but I want to

show you how to use dialogue between two people and I think

that might help you to improve your writing.

On SBAC test that's a question. They give you the middle

and they want you to write a beginning. So a lot of times

for my mini lessons I'll practice that. I'll take a

student's story cut off the beginning and the other students

have to write a beginning and make it applicable.

So there's, you can, a teacher can look at any standard and

just make it into a mini lesson.

because she liked it in there.

Ok. And you should put why she didn't want to be the one.

And I changed that and I put because It was on the school.

OK.

So. And you put the beginning introduces the character.

Which is Amber.

Students need to have the freedom to talk during

Writer's Worshop. They need to be able to collaborate and

build on each other's ideas. I explain to them what is

correct talk and what is incorrect talk.

And. Um. I'll stop with my editing and walk around

monitor listen to make sure tha the talk is correct and I can

see from across the room if it's appropriate talk or not.

What were cold and juicy here?

The fruits and vegetables.

Right. So they and you are going to say

they ARE..instead of THEIR.

They ARE cold and juicy.

Very nice Yadizy. Past tense verbs. Getting

better. Very good. Next time you write I am

going to make a list for you a list just to be verbs to

be careful of. So on your past tense verbs...

Writer's Workshop helps to differentiate instruction

especially when I am teaching ELD learners because I teach

to the highest level that I can, but then during our

conference time I will talk to them and teach at their level

Also when they give to me their writing I don't expect

fantastic A plus papers. I expect them to write where

they are at and maybe push themselves a bit. So every time

I talk, we push a little bit more and they learn a little

bit more. And we will review or I will push and look at them

and see what they need. But it's a completely different

shape of instruction because they get their one on one time

with me in the practice.

...then some people arrived and it was strange.

Good. Now on the last one we talked

about you had WE and you changed it to THEY.

So we were working on our pronouns. And you were

working on your point of view. You decided as a writer to talk

in the third person. So you are talking about Kevin, you are

talking about Brian. They are people out here. Not you. So

if they are not you, you cannot put WE. So you decide OK

I'm going to make my story third person let's talk about THEM

THEY so you change that. So we want to make sure that we

continue to change it to the thd person. The whole story

has to be third person. We cant switch over to I. So let's see

if we did this. Go ahead and continue with your middle.

It was the Allowitz Kevin shouted. They had came to kill

all the otter. They had lied to us because they had said they

would share otter with us. Men died and my dad because the

Allowitz had killed them.

The Great Choomaz Fight by Enoch.

Long, Long ago there was a Choomaz tribe that just

finished having a Pow Wow. When they were finished,

the chief and the tribes all went to sleep but out of

the blue the enemy Cuhilla Indians attacked out of nowhere

They were jealous of the Choomaz people because they lived

d

that definitely helps Common Core standards because the

students need to be able to speak orally. They need to be

confident. They need to look at their audience and speak in a

loud voice. And when I start the presentations, I'll start

with a small group and as the year progresses we get

larger and larger until it is whole class. And at first

the students are nervouse but at the end they love it. They

can't wait to present what they have written and show

everybody. The students are also good listeners and they

learn how to praise each other and appreciate what they

have written. And it just develops a community of learners.

The chief learned a valuable lesson. Just with a lot of

work you get the best benefit out of it.

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