Subtitles section Play video
Hello everyone and welcome to this special episode, the follow up to my very first video.
Now that the writing of the Power of Three half of Paws of Stars is behind me it's
time that I examine Omen of the Stars, my favorite arc but also one with a litany of
issues.
Now, I don't want anyone thinking that Omen of the Stars is just a continuation of the
failures in Power of Three.
These arcs are quite tightly joined in terms of their plots and casts, but they have very
different problems.
Power of Three tried to do too many types of stories at once, and didn't go far enough
with any of them, resulting in a mangled mess of a plotline.
Omen of the Stars does have a story it wants to tell, and even consistently makes progress
on that plotline, to some extent anyway.
But it has two main problems, completely distinct from those of Power of Three: a disconnect
between the characters and the conflict, and the details of the conflict itself being mangled
and often stupid.
To illustrate this, rather than going through each book and explaining its progress towards
the goals of the arc, I will give a rundown of the main arc's conflict through each
book and then trace each character's main character's journey individually to see
how they interweave with the plot.
The conflict of this arc is the Dark Forest building an army to launch an all-out attack
on the clans.
The Fourth Apprentice didn't go too deep into the conflict, something to be expected
with the first book in an arc.
However, it did have Breezepelt team up with Brokenstar to attack Jayfeather and Poppyfrost.
We learn that Breezepelt and Tigerheart are likely Dark Forest trainees, and that the
Dark Forest cats are able to come down into the physical world.
Fading Echoes is what really gets this plot running, since, through Ivypaw's perspective,
we get to see the Dark Forest itself.
The prologue shows us how the Dark Forest manipulated Breezepelt with the relationship
and revelations established in Power of Three, and many chapters show the Dark Forest manipulating
Ivypaw based on her relationship with Dovepaw and her desire for attention.
In Night Whispers, we begin seeing group training among all the Dark Forest trainees, and that
the training of cats in the Dark Forest is far more widespread than the characters might
have initially thought.
They go through rigorous battle training each night with some brand new Dark Forest cats
never before seen in the series.
Their goal is revealed in the very end to be destroying the clans and Starclan.
How they plan to do that...other than just attacking with trainees on their side, is
unclear, but their strength and skill is growing.
Also in this book, the three protagonists find out Ivypaw is training with the Dark
Forest, she finds out that the Dark Forest is evil and trying to hurt the clans, and
agrees to spy on them for the Three instead.
Sign of the Moon, other than adding a few new trainees, does nothing to advance the
Dark Forest story.
In The Forgotten Warrior, Ivypool becomes a...warrior in the Dark Forest?
Whatever that entails.
We then arrive at The Last Hope, where the Dark Forest cats and trainees begin training
in and exploring the physical world.
Then in the last few chapters, they attack every camp at once.
Only two of the trainees decided to fight on the Dark Forest's side but the battle
still led to the deaths of Hollyleaf, Mousefur, and Ferncloud among assumed others.
Spottedleaf is double-killed by Mapleshade, Tigerstar double-dies to Firestar who dies
to...a burning tree, and the rest of the Dark Forest cats flee without a leader.
The clans won.
That's a pretty simple conflict.
Bad guys grow in strength.
Bad guys attack.
Good guys fight them and win.
This would explain why the progress on the conflict across the six books is so slow.
There just isn't much story to tell.
But what fills the rest of the pages then?
Well, did you notice that I didn't mention a single protagonist character other than
Ivypool in that synopsis?
Let's see what they were up to.
Jayfeather is determined to fulfill the prophecy, and he does this mainly by speaking to Starclan
and sometimes Rock about what they should do whenever he gets the chance.
Unfortunately neither of them are particularly good sources of information so he spends most
of his time checking in on or helping out his clanmates like Poppyfrost and Briarlight,
which each make very compelling stories but aren't all that related to the oncoming
war.
Later in the arc he takes a couple detours to return to ancient-land to make Half Moon
the first Stoneteller and gets caught up in Flametail's death, which he is blamed for.
Flametail death at least ties into another plotline in this arc: Starclan being aggressive
and dumb as a rock suddenly.
They split up from each other, demand that the medicine cats stop speaking, and on Flametail's
side, refuse to clarify what happened at his death to stop the conflict in the clans before
the real army arrives.
When that finally concludes, Jayfeather decides to pursue yet another prophecy: that of the
fourth cat.
He thinks of multiple cats it could be and thinks about how important it is to find them
often for the last two books.
But just before the battle, Bluestar just...tells him it's Firestar.
Then, other than forgiving Leafpool, he does absolutely nothing of consequence in the final
battle.
For the arc in general it felt like they were giving him menial tasks to keep him occupied
without having to involve him in the conflict, since his character wouldn't stand by and
do nothing.
Lionblaze meanwhile is fully capable of doing nothing.
It's his forte.
He mentors Dovepaw, which has no effect on him.
He's still mad at Squirrelflight and Leafpool, something that is resolved in his head spontaneously
during a fight with Breezepelt in Night Whiskers, and spends 4 and a half books caught in a
will-they-won't-they romance with Cinderheart, which has some reveals about his power and
her Cinderpelt reincarnation sprinkled in for nonsensical drama to prolong their relationship's
screentime.
The biggest thing he does is accidentally killing Russetfur in a battle with Shadowclan,
which he is sad about for half a book before it's forgotten forever.
When the final battle arrives, he does at least fight in it, in Shadowclan, but other
than killing one background Dark Forest cat, he doesn't do anything important.
On the topic of Dovewing, she is mostly a part of this plot because she is dragged into
it by other forces without acting on her own motives or beliefs.
Her power, and not knowing that it's strange, pulls her into her beaver quest.
Lionblaze and Jayfeather drag her into the prophecy and Ivypool's jealousy along with
Dovewing's desire to stay close with her sister pulls her into learning about the Dark
Forest.
When she does get to make her own choices, she mostly just tries, unsuccessfully, to
live a normal happy life.
She plays with her sister, she cares about cats she knows when they are in danger, and
she meets secretly with Tigerheart, often the only cat she can feel free with, and one
that she quickly realizes she loves.
She doesn't stay with him forever though.
His behavior around Flametail's murder caused her to put off their relationship, and get
closer to Bumblestripe, another way in which she is forced into an important part of her
life without her opinions being taken into account.
When the Dark Forest actually arrives, she announces their arrival, but then proceeds
to do nothing for the battle itself.
Of all the protagonists, Dovewing spends the least time thinking about the Dark Forest.
It's not really a part of her life.
It's just something she was placed into without warning.
She's often a pitiable character, for how little choice she gets in her own life, but
she, like the other members of the Three, do nothing to affect the outcome of the plot.
Flametail, for the period that he is a point-of-view character, at least, is a standard medicine
cat with no knowledge of the Dark Forest at all.
When he dies, though, he is lured into the Dark Forest to nearly be murdered by Ivypool,
which presumably let him know what was happening.
After another two books pass, he becomes an obstacle for Jayfeather for seemingly no reason,
steadfastly believing it would be better for Starclan and the clans to be split up and
angry as war is coming than for Jayfeather to be proven innocent by his testimony...he's
a piece of work.
Ivypool therefore stands as the only protagonist to have any of her story revolve around the
actual battle the arc is based around.
Her jealousy over Dovepaw is well established by the end of the first book, so when Hawkfrost
approaches her in Fading Echoes, and his manipulations land, it works for us, even if you don't
agree with the premise for her jealousy in the first place.
She spends the whole rest of the arc as a point of view character within the Dark Forest,
learning about it and seeing first-hand many examples of its brutality, from the training
to the murders committed to the standards expected of trainees.
During the battle, she is able to convince the trainees not to fight on the Dark Forest's
side (even if it was ridiculously easy), and she witnesses and is part of the most impactful
battles with Hollyleaf, Hawkfrost, and Breezepelt.
Ivypool also spends some of her time working on a relationship with Blossomfall, but the
vast majority of her story centers around her sister and the Dark Forest, which easily
makes her the most intertwined with the arc's plot out of all the point-of-view protagonists.
Most of our characters spend the arc completely disconnected from the plot, having their own
relationships and adventures entirely distinct from the conflict the arc is working with.
Especially egregious is prophesied three, who's entire purpose in life was supposed
to be defeating the Dark Forest, doing nothing at all to stop them in the end.
The only cats who could claim that even partially are Firestar, who by killing the Dark Forest's
leader somehow made the battle end immediately, and Ivypool, who withinin the last moments
convinced the Dark Forest trainees to fight on their clans' side.
But even her part of the story is far from perfect, and the reason for that has to do
with the other big problem with the arc.
The Dark Forest, both in the plan they seem to have, the lore behind them, and the way
they are defeated is just...silly.
First off, what exactly was their plan?
If they defeated the clans, either by killing them all or terrorizing whatever survivors
came out, what would happen then?
Would they form Tigerclan again?
Well that can't be.
Apparently Brokenstar was the Dark Forest's leader until he died, and he was always more
interested in driving clans out rather than bringing them into his own clan.
Were they just going to take over the lake territories?
They don't need them.
Dead cats don't need to eat.
Is the Dark Forest so terrible that they want a living plane to take over to get out?
Well that might have been true in previous arcs but in Omen of the Stars the Dark Forest
is a pretty thriving place where all the cats living there in death can talk to each other
and be as brutal as they like with no repercussions.
But even the idea of them winning is a ridiculously far stretch, for two main reasons.
First, there was no way that a majority of the clan cats training in the Dark Forest
would have ever fought beside them when that choice meant attacking the clans.
Maybe Breezepelt and, for some reason, Redwillow have evil natures that allowed them to easily
side with the villains, but everyone else was portrayed through the whole arc as a victim
who was only in the Dark Forest because they were tricked and lied to about the true intentions
of the cats there.
Most of them were only there to become stronger for their clans, which isn't a lie conducive
to making them attack let alone kill the cats in those clans.
If we were to believe that the trainees would fight on the Dark Forest's side, either
we would need far more cats like Breezepelt and Redwillow, who genuinely want to destroy
the clans, or, more likely, the lies the Dark Forest told would have to be more convincing
and targeted to not just make the clan cats keep training with them, but to make them
fight beside the Dark Forest when the time came.
This would also probably mean, for a lot of trainees, the villains would have to throw
out killing the clan cats all together, and opt for a slightly more peaceful goal that
would still transition power to the Dark Forest.
There is a second problem as well.
If every Dark Forest cat we've ever been introduced to, even after Omen of the Stars,
joined in the battle, including Antpelt, who died as a trainee and became part of the Dark
Forest, they would have a mass of 15 cats.
If they then added every living trainee from the time of Omen of the Stars, including Thornclaw
who was only ever said to be a Dark Forest trainee retroactively once the arc was complete,
that would be another 16 cats.
Discounting every queen and elder, the clans have 68 cats fighting against that force before
any Starclan spirits come down to fight beside them.
The Dark Forest's army of 31 cats wouldn't be able to beat that 68 clan cats even under
the best of circumstances.
This is why The Last Hope had to add in random faceless, nameless, description-less cats
during the battle to increase the size of their army.
They just didn't ever have a chance of winning.
This is one of the main reasons why Ivypool is so ineffective as well.
Because the protagonists don't have any impact on the conflict's outcome (the Dark
Forest would lose regardless of their actions), she didn't bring them any intel to use in
defeating them.
And because the Dark Forest is actually a small group of purely evil guys, there isn't
even anything useful she could bring back to help learn more about them.
“When evil guys attack, hit them hard” is the best advice you could give.
In this situation, a spy couldn't help.
And the few things she does learn, like herself being forced to kill Antpelt to prove her
loyalty, she hides out of embarrassment.
Omen of the Stars as a whole is, I would argue, better than Power of Three on a technical
level.
The plot has a direction and progresses steadily, if slowly, through to the end.
The characters are often charming and many side characters have sweet stories to follow.
But it's a far cry from perfect, with protagonists that have no impact on the main story and
the villains being a bland, unthreatening force whose plan comes apart if you look at
it for more than a moment.
But those details are things that could be ironed out.
This arc's potential is clear, and if the kinks were worked out, with the grandiosity
and emotional appeal that it already has, it could become something truly great…So
I hope I manage to do that now, as I begin writing the Omen of the Stars half of Paws
of Stars.
The third book, Inferno, is now up, and as always the link to the whole fanfiction is
in the description below if you're interested.
Thank you for watching, and always make sure to pay attention if 15 people ever start plotting
the destruction of your civilization.
Eh, They probably won't succeed anyway, but it's better to be safe...and engaged, at all