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I've long had a problem with characters that fail to make choices that guide the story,
either by creating problematic situations that must be solved,
or by solving situations themselves. Part of this comes down to how out-of-touch I can feel with
a story that doesn't actually involve our main characters, the eyes we see the world through,
to any sizable degree. But it can be even more frustrating when character choices that would
otherwise define their identities are left out in favor of warping the world around
them instead to create a specific emotional response in the reader. Now, I would argue that
these are separate problems, but they are also connected by their source: character-led choices.
On a structural level, there is a reason why choices are so important,
why it is imperative that you give the main characters of your story agency in their
world and over their journey. In a fictional world, one of the top priorities is connecting
the audience to the characters and storyline, and making sure there is some sort of journey
that will take place through those avenues for the audience to follow: character arcs and plotlines.
The main character you see the world through is usually, and in Warriors, is always,
the character through which the journey is supposed to funnel. We see the journey with
them and see the character and / or world change. If a character doesn't make choices at all,
or if their choices are completely obsolete to the character or plot journeys, the character
themselves become obsolete. We could remove them from the story, replacing them with an omniscient
third person perspective, and the story would still progress as usual. We are not present to
see the changes, why they were made, or the mighty triumphs someone must have taken to win the day,
and so the story, to us, either feels confusing, disconnected, or ultimately meaningless.
On this level, I actually find the four protagonists of Omen of the Stars to be some
of the worst offenders. Jayfeather, Lionblaze, Ivypool, and Dovewing all do make choices,
and those choices allow us to see who they are as characters. Jayfeather argues with Starclan and
yet gets frantically determined at the prospect of a death he might be able to prevent. Lionblaze
pines endlessly over his rocky relationship with Cinderheart, but has no hesitation in
battle to the point that he kills Russetfur. Ivypool lets her jealousy over Dovewing fester
even in the face of counterevidence, but also seeks out other close relationships that she
is endlessly apologetic for like Blossomfall and Hawkfrost. And Dovewing reaches out to and tries
to befriend cats everywhere, but also has limits around cats putting her on a pedestal or using
her as a tool. As much as we come to understand these characters though, none of them affect the
overall plot. None of the three's powers were used to defeat the Dark Forest, Ivypool never
saw anything that gave intel the three didn't know already, the entire plot with Starclan illogically
breaking up and Jayfeather bringing them back together was insanely short and ultimately had no
effect on the Dark Forest or their final battle, and their final struggle to find the fourth cat
was completely meaningless since they only found the fourth cat, Firestar, after he did his duty,
and Firestar would have fought just as hard whether or not he was in another prophecy. With
or without the protagonists of the arc, the Dark Forest's rise to power, battle with the clans, and
defeat would go exactly the same way. These cats make no impact on the plot we're supposed to be
following, and as such we end up feeling detached from the plot of Omen of the Stars as a whole.
However you can still walk away, and in fact I still did walk away, enjoying Omen of the Stars
because I got to see characters being themselves as the plot passed them by in the background. I
enjoyed the people I spent the time with even if I didn't care even a bit about what the events of
that time were. This is why I consider the second level on which choices are necessary for your
characters to be even more important, as it has to do with the very identity of the characters.
The choices I will be considering here are much smaller and subtler, but ten times as important.
A fictional character is difficult to define at first. In nearly all cases,
you won't come out of the first chapter being able to list off all of their traits,
and starting a complete story by directly telling the reader what your characters are
like is an approach that lacks a lot of subtlety and prevents the reader from gleaning that
information for themselves during their own interpretations. Putting that option aside,
though, you as an author still need a way to communicate who a character is
and why they do the things they do, along with hopefully giving an opportunity for development
and growth over the course of a story. For this purpose, one of the most useful tools
a writer has to employ is choice, which in this case is synonymous with individuality.
Choices, unlike something like backstory, define who a character is now. With every
choice a character makes, that choice should be made for a reason, and ideally, over time,
readers should come to understand what motivates them to make each choice. With each subsequent
choice they are given, and each response to those choices, the reader is able to build a larger and
richer picture of who a character is, even if they aren't doing that process consciously.
Considering how abstract this is, I'd like to provide an example. Say that a character, let's
call them Bob, is our brand new protagonist. On the first page, what do you know about Bob? Well,
nothing, of course. But as you read, you see that Bob's mother licks him firmly on the head
and asks him to not leave the nursery again while she goes out. Bob gives a heavy sigh and agrees,
crashing limply down onto his nest while silently crying out about his boredom. Now you know that
Bob has a mother who cares about him but can't be with him all of the time, that Bob is likely
a kit, that Bob has previously left the nursery without consent, and that he doesn't like having
to stay in the nursery. Perhaps in a couple of chapters, Bob is made an apprentice and he is
the only one in this ceremony. Perhaps, at this point, Bob immediately goes to speak with the
older apprentices as he takes joy in the fact that he won't be stuck alone anymore. Now we not only
know that Bob is an only child and that he enjoys company, but we can look back to his first moment
and see that the reason, the motivation behind him not enjoying the nursery or wanting to leave
it could be about his solitude, since he didn't enjoy being the only cat his age in one boring
room for moons on end. Each chapter that moves forward, we learn more about Bob in the moment,
but can also use what we learn to look back and inform our understanding of Bob's earlier actions,
allowing us to build a fuller picture of who Bob is. Without Bob being given the opportunity to
make choices, to leave the nursery rather than making up games for himself or asking the elders
for stories, to immediately greet the older apprentices rather than asking to go out on
patrol or getting to know his mentor, we wouldn't be able to learn who he is. If the entire world,
regardless of previous characterization, relentlessly praised or berated or ignored him,
and all of Bob's own characterization was just feeling happy or sad about how
the world treated him, we would know nothing about Bob except that he is in that situation.
So speaking of character choices being left out in favor of making the situation *around*
the characters as sad as possible, it's time to discuss Violetshine and Shadowsight. Both
main characters had extremely hard lives, and the Shadowclans that surrounded each of
them were cruel, often illogical communities with little to no understanding or sympathy
for them. Violetshine and Shadowsight both faced bullying and continuous scorn
from their clanmates even when it made no sense at all for them to feel that way,
in Violetshine's case because Shadowclan *chose* and even *fought* to have her in their clan and
then spent the rest of her life treating her like a waste of fresh-kill, and in Shadowsight's case
because it was plainly clear that Shadowsight was just reporting messages as he saw them and both
the leaders and other medicine cats agreed with the interpretation they came to so he is in no
way at fault for Ashfur's rise to power. Bullying, even illogical bullying, is something that people,
unfortunately, truly do go through, though. So why do I dislike these characters so much?
Well, it's mainly because these characters' status as bully victims or outcasts in their
clans is used as a replacement for establishment of their personalities or development of their
characters. Violetshine acted as a camera whose motivations were never kept consistent long
enough to establish any trait about her. Her bullying made her...mad about being bullied,
but it didn't affect her future performance in any notable way. She joined the Kin because
she liked Needletail, not because she disliked Shadowclan after they scorned her for her whole
life. In fact, she decided to return to them of her own free will before the Kin took over,
as if their bullying never really mattered. Its only purpose was making us feel sorry for her,
while leaving out any motivations for either her or her clanmates to do the things they did.
Shadowsight was always an unsure medicine cat who did his best to share and follow his visions since
that's what his culture encourages everyone in his position to do. When he was bullied for doing
just that, it didn't do much other than make him feel slightly worse than he already felt about
himself. Really, aside from being a standard medicine cat and dying for part of one book,
I can't think of anything notable he did *at all* until *after* all the bullying in Darkness Within,
when he sort of decided to free Ashfur without any motivation for that choice either and proceeded to
immediately regret it and…hypothetically worked against it for the remaining two books, while
still not doing anything notable for any of his chapters. In both cases, I genuinely couldn't name
more than one or two *personality* rather than situational traits for either of them, especially
not ones that are represented consistently across their arcs. Violetshine is…mean to her sister but
clingy to Needletail? So stubborn I guess? But no, she also joins the Kin very easily and is
pretty quickly convinced to fight back against the Kin or rejoin Shadowclan, her tormentors,
if she feels like it. Uh, inconsistently holds grudges then, maybe? Shadowsight meanwhile…well,
he sure is hesitant and insecure, most of the time, except when he occasionally gets bursts
of determination or certainly. I couldn't tell you why these moments pop up when they do, it's
mostly a “needed for the plot” type thing. And he's generally a nice guy…and that might be it.
Late-Sunny coming in here after this video has already been done for a while. There's another
reason that I failed to mention in here but that is definitely important and becomes especially
so in the most recent example that is beginning to happen in A Starless Clan. Having the entire
clan senselessly attack the protagonist also rids the authors of any need to justify either side
of the argument. The protagonists are often too broken down by having bullying on all sides and
aren't prepared to offer any counterarguments to the problems their clans have with them and with
so many cats in agreement, the cats in the mob aren't pressured to add points to their
argument at all. Violetshine just doesn't belong here. No reasons need be given. Shadowsight just
doesn't deserve to be a medicine cat and is at fault for Bramblestar's death. No reasons need
be given. And yes, small spoilers for A Starless Clan, Nightheart simply is disgracing his family
and Firestar. No reasons need be given. We as fans can think of reasons for either side and
even argue why certain characters might have reason to take up one argument or another,
but the characters in the story never take any of those arguments,
because they don't have to. These three gray-area situations are never and will never be discussed,
because the framing of the story doesn't leave room for it. The two sides in examination aren't
those who want to follow a prophecy versus those who find Shadowclan to already be too crowded,
or those who think Shadowsight was just doing his job versus those who resent him for not
catching Ashfur's manipulations earlier, or those who think Nightheart should be allowed
to choose his own identity versus those who consider upholding legacy to be an important
tradition. The only sides left are the bully victim and the many, many bullies. And that is
a black and white situation that the readers are expected to sympathize with and that no author or
editor has to justify the poor morality of. Okay. Back to your regularly scheduled programming.
Now, I should be clear that bullying itself isn't the problem. Crookedstar was also bullied
in his super edition, not on as wide a scale, but certainly made uncomfortable by most of the clan.
However, unlike Violetshine or Shadowsight, the writing used this situation as a way to explore
more of who he is, and as a defining motivation for his actions. His initial name change and
being held back from being an apprentice made him want to leave the clan to stay with the barn cats
instead who didn't mind him and could help him learn to use his crooked jaw. When he came back,
his scars and the treatment he got for them were still the motivation for him to work harder,
train not only with his own mentor, Cedarpelt, but also with Mapleshade in his dreams, and become the
best warrior he possibly could to prove himself to his clan, something he never stopped doing
through to the end of his book. His ambition and determination were elements of his character
shown off even before his injury, so using them in conjunction with his reactions to adversity
led to a character who made choice after choice and became both Riverclan's leader and a Dark
Forest trainee as a result. His bullying isn't all that he is. And, perhaps most importantly,
each of his clanmates had individual reactions to his injuries and felt like real characters
with their own lives rather than a rabid, faceless mob, so the bullying that he did
receive felt significantly more real, like each of those clanmates had as much agency as he did.
Giving your characters meaningful choices to make and allowing those to both be entwined in the
plot and guide how your characters' personalities are shown off is so intrinsic to writing any good
story. There really isn't a way I can stress this enough. If your characters don't care about the
plot, your readers won't either. And if the readers don't know who your characters are,
they won't even care about them, no matter how sad you make their situation. The deal is already done
for every character I discussed in this video, but perhaps you can take these lessons into your own
writing, or let it guide how you think about upcoming character portrayals in the series.
Thank you for watching, and always remember that every choice you make defines who you are.